A for Alfi - B-/C+
Thesis: Lacks development and simply states the two examples the writer is going to talk about in his body paragraphs.
Structure & Style: Repeatedly uses incorrect grammar, and tries to use vocabulary but obviously misuses it. Has a decent logical flow to it.
Sources & Evidence: Does not effectively analyze the quotes and simply places them to reaffirm his statement.
B for Beatrice - B-/B
Thesis: Long and confusing, distracts the reader from the main point of the essay
Structure & Style: Standard 5 body paragraph compare and contrast essay. Often becomes repetitive by reusing words. However, the essay is written logically and is solid.
Sources & Evidence: Has a solid amount of quotes, however, she sometimes does not fully analyze some of her quotes.
C for Cecilia - B+/A-
Thesis: A little unclear, but answers the prompt
Structure & Style: The essay flowed logically, and her diction choice was great.
Sources & Evidence: The quotes were well placed and analyzed effectively.
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